Monday, December 29, 2008
Sunday, December 28, 2008
Chapter 1, Page 8
Baron: "Bathroom is down the hall."Joe: "Do you buy documents or just show them?"
Baron: "Depends on whether they're stolen or not."
Joe: "I guess sitting in this crypt all day makes you cranky."
Baron: "No, just dealing with burnouts...Whatcha got?"
Chapter 1, Page 7
Baron: "Double Americano, short, black."
Barista: "You sure you don't want to try the Police Chief special roast?"
Baron: "Y'know, I just can't trust a cop who drinks Vanilla Almond Decaf."
Chapter 1, Page 6
Newspaper Headline:A DYNASTY IN THE MAKING
Charles Lauck Honored with Position Held by Father.
Chapter 1, Page 5
Alarm Radio: It'ds 6:01, 52 degrees and drizzling at KHOL...Mayor Lopez will be among those on hand today as new police chief Charles Lauck is officially promoted at a ceremony...Whaletown High's marching band will perform Pomp and Circumstance...As expected, former Police Chief Dale Ramsey declined the invitation to perform a formal handover...
Chapter 1, Page 4
Baron: Gorgeous Sunrise. Reminds me of the one two days ago. Two das ago when no one was trying to kill me.
Chapter 1, Page 2
Baron:"You guys know Sam Gray!"
Tim: "We don't talk to strangers."
Jim:"Yeah, We don't talk to strangers."
Baron:"I'm Sam Gray's Daughter!"
Tim: "Funny. He never mentioned a daughter."
Jim:"Nope, never mentioned a daughter."
Rough Draft-Authors' Note
This is the Rough Draft of Whaletown #1. Funny thing about it is it was written Five years ago...To the DAY (mostly)!
This story needs to get out, and this was the first time I ever attempted to write a longer form story (more than 2 or 3 pages!)
In revisiting this world, I found many things in the first draft that are unchanged from our current incarnation. I thought in the spirit of artistic endeavor, I would publish this rough draft, mistakes and all, for the benefit of this story and in case someone wants to peek behind the curtain.
Much of it is illegible, some major points have changed, and characters have evolved. This is a document of our methodology, I hope it is enjoyable nonetheless.
B &M
12-28-2008
This story needs to get out, and this was the first time I ever attempted to write a longer form story (more than 2 or 3 pages!)
In revisiting this world, I found many things in the first draft that are unchanged from our current incarnation. I thought in the spirit of artistic endeavor, I would publish this rough draft, mistakes and all, for the benefit of this story and in case someone wants to peek behind the curtain.
Much of it is illegible, some major points have changed, and characters have evolved. This is a document of our methodology, I hope it is enjoyable nonetheless.
B &M
12-28-2008
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